Special:Badtitle/NS90:Forum:Writer's Workshop/Some feedback on my Creepypasta?

Hey, since this place has a writers workshop forum, I was wondering if y'all could check out this Creepypasta I wrote and tell me what you think of it.

It's meant to try and make an overexposed icon of horror scary again without ever mentioning its name. I also need to mention that, while the protagonist says some very offensive stuff, you're not supposed to agree with him, and the idea was to make him look like kind of an asshole.

I hope you like it.