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I scanned through Pet Shop of Horrors and Buffy the Vampire Slayer. Ideas are noticeably clearer and easier to follow along, bringing us one step closer to launch. Previously I can't understand how a trope would apply to a work; now I can. However, we aren't 100% finished yet. We can still do some work, for example I would shorten

"In the season 2 premiere, Buffy is suffering bad PTSD from the Master killing her, and it means that she's unusually sour with all her friends. Xander tolerates this until vampires kidnap Willow, along with Giles and Cordelia, to bring back the Master. Buffy is horrified and apologizes for being off her game. He tells her to shove it unless she can help mount a rescue, though they later make up once their friends are saved. Whether or not Xander had a point is muddied by the fact that Buffy can't talk to a trauma specialist about her PTSD, and Giles doesn't count as her watcher."

to

"In the season 2 premiere, Buffy is suffering PTSD from the Master killing her, so she is unusually sour with all her friends. Xander tolerates this until vampires kidnap Willow, Giles and Cordelia to bring back the Master. Buffy is horrified and apologizes for being off her game. Xander tells her to shove it unless she can help mount a rescue, though they later make up once their friends are saved."

Your next job is to go through the examples and find phrases which can be shortened. The shorter the sentence, the easier it is for me to follow along. For example, I shortened "and it means that" to "so". The word "that" as well as "emphasis" words such as "very" and "a lot" may be taken out. After all, Brevity Is Wit.

If you need me to help, just let me know :)

When writing examples, keep in mind that most people on trope pages probably aren't familiar with the work you're talking about.