Hidden Prophices/YMMV
- Accidental Innuendo: The author didn't know what the word rape meant until after she used it.
- Mary Sue: Moonshimmer, and also Tranquildream to some extent.
- Black Hole Sue: This is Moonshimmer for sure. Everyone wants her to be their leader, and they think she is their 'chosen one'.
- Purity Sue: Both Moonshimmer and her sister Tranquildream.
- Narm: Barely a sentence goes by without it being narm-y.
- Particularly Screepaw's death.
"NO! Screepaw, my love, I will avenge your death!" Tranquila cried. Tears streamed down her face, and she collapsed to the ground by her dying lover. |
- And the fight between Moonshimmer and Tranquildream.
""Stop it! We can not do this! I will not fight! I am a pacifier!" Screamed Moonshimmer. Her fur was prickling and her purple eyes were wide and the moon on her forehead was beginning to glow. Sometimes it did that when there was danger around her! |