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Wow, that was some creepy shit.
Needs a good spell check, but the story structure seems strong. Love how you paced things getting more and more freaky and insane.
I have no idea what the overused horror is you're referring to (I don't follow creepypasta a lot), but what your protagonist (characterization for him is great, don't change it) goes through is definitely Bring My Brown Pants worthy.