Topic on Forum:Writer's Workshop

Hey, since this place has a writers workshop forum, I was wondering if y'all could check out this Creepypasta I wrote and tell me what you think of it.

It's meant to try and make an overexposed icon of horror scary again without ever mentioning its name. I also need to mention that, while the protagonist says some very offensive stuff, you're not supposed to agree with him, and the idea was to make him look like kind of an asshole.

I hope you like it.

Wow, that was some creepy shit.

Needs a good spell check, but the story structure seems strong. Love how you paced things getting more and more freaky and insane.

I have no idea what the overused horror is you're referring to (I don't follow creepypasta a lot), but what your protagonist (characterization for him is great, don't change it) goes through is definitely Bring My Brown Pants worthy.

Hmm. Got a definite Lovecraft vibe. The 'pollsters' are fairly obviously Deep One hybrids and I'm guessing that the 'mayor' is Cthulhu or something. You did a pretty good job of making that sort of thing nightmareish again.